Watches

Mar 12, 2017 01:32
I bought a wrist watch at an outlet mall yesterday.

It was a little expensive, but I'm quite satisfied because I could bought my favorite design on sale.

According to the British institution YouGov, more than half of people between 16 to 34 use mobile phones as a way of knowing the time.

Also, according to a questionnaire survey by a Japanese company, about one third business people between 20s to 30s go work without wearing watches.

It is thought that the number of young people who don't wear watches has rapidly increased due to the spread of mobile phones.

In fact, I normally didn't wear a watch very much.

However, recently somehow I came to have an urge of wearing good watches.

Someday I would like to buy a more classy watch.
腕時計

私は昨日、アウトレットモールで腕時計を買いました。

少し高い買い物でしたが、気に入ったデザインのものを通常よりも安く買うことができて、とても満足しています。

イギリスの世論調査機関「YouGov」によると、16～34歳の若者の半数以上が、時間を知る方法として携帯電話を使用しているそうです。

また、日本の企業が20～30代の社会人にアンケート調査を行ったところ、3人に1人は腕時計をつけずに仕事に行くとのことでした。

携帯電話・スマートフォンの普及により、腕時計をつけない若者が急増しているようです。

実際私も普段はあまり着けていませんでした。

ただ、どういうわけか最近、良い腕時計を身に着けたいという欲求にかられるようになりました。

いつか、もっともっと良い腕時計を買いたいです。
No. 1　MonoChrono's correction
  • Watches
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • I bought a wrist watch at an outlet mall yesterday.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • It was a little expensive, but I'm quite satisfied because I could bought my favorite design on sale.
  • It was a little expensive, but I'm quite satisfied because I could bought buy my favorite design on sale.
  • According to the British institution YouGov, more than half of people between 16 to 34 use mobile phones as a way of knowing the time.
  • According to the British [market research] institution YouGov, more than half of the people between 16 to 34 use mobile phones as a way of knowing the time.
    　The square brackets mean that you can (but don't have to) include their content in the sentence.
  • Also, according to a questionnaire survey by a Japanese company, about one third business people between 20s to 30s go work without wearing watches.
  • Also, according to [the results of] a questionnaire survey [performed] by a Japanese company, about one third of business people between 20s to 30s go work without wearing watches.
  • It is thought that the number of young people who don't wear watches has rapidly increased due to the spread of mobile phones.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • In fact, I normally didn't wear a watch very much.
  • (As for me/In fact), I normally didn't use to wear a watch very much often.
    　The parentheses mean you have to choose one of the options provided.
    "In fact" isn't incorrect, but it sounds unnatural, because its function is to contradict what was said earlier. However, the earlier point was about a general tendency among young people. Whether a single person (meaning you) fit this tendency isn't really relevant.
    Past habits (or their lack) are often expressed with "used to".
  • However, recently somehow I came to have an urge of wearing good watches.
  • However, recently, I somehow I came to have (felt/been feeling) an urge of to wearing (a good watch/good watches).
    　Not many people feel an urge to wear multiple watches, which is why a reader can think the original sentence is sort of odd. If you wanted to say that you had an urge to own many good watches so that you could wear a different one each day, you should express it more precisely.
  • Someday I would like to buy a more classy watch.
  • Someday, I would like to buy a more classy watch.
One of the functions of modern marketing is attaching a sense of additional value to otherwise ordinary objects. Similarly, sometimes the goal is to create a sense of need in the buyer. I think it's wise to consider this before paying a high price for a gadget.
Overall, the quality of your writing is high, but you should try practising the perfect tenses.
Toru
Thank you so much for the corrections and your helpful explanations!

Yes, we have to consider the necessity and the additional value. Speaking of watches, if it comes to luxury watches above a certain price, it will be almost completely fashion.
MonoChrono
どういたしまして。
No. 2　prateeti's correction
  • Watches
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • I bought a wrist watch at an outlet mall yesterday.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • It was a little expensive, but I'm quite satisfied because I could bought my favorite design on sale.
  • It was a little expensive, but I'm quite satisfied because I could buy my favorite design on sale.
  • According to the British institution YouGov, more than half of people between 16 to 34 use mobile phones as a way of knowing the time.
  • According to the British institution YouGov, more than half of the people between 16 to 34 use mobile phones as a way of telling the time.
  • Also, according to a questionnaire survey by a Japanese company, about one third business people between 20s to 30s go work without wearing watches.
  • Also, according to a questionnaire survey by a Japanese company, about one third of business people between the ages of 20 to 30 go work without wearing watches.
  • In fact, I normally didn't wear a watch very much.
  • In fact, I normally don't wear a watch very much.
  • However, recently somehow I came to have an urge of wearing good watches.
  • However, recently, I have somehow had the urge to wear good watches.
  • Someday I would like to buy a more classy watch.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
Toru
Thank you so much for correcting my post! (^^)
No. 3　JayfeatherRex's correction
  • Watches
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • I bought a wrist watch at an outlet mall yesterday.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • According to the British institution YouGov, more than half of people between 16 to 34 use mobile phones as a way of knowing the time.
  • According to the British institution, YouGov, more than half of people between 16 and to 34 use mobile phones to tell as a way of knowing the time.
    　(in blue)
    This is an appositive phrase. "YouGov" is renaming "the British institution." If you switch the two, you can see it does the same thing-->"According to YouGov, a British institution, more than..." "a British institution" is renaming "YouGov."

    No one says "knowing time." It's always "telling time."
  • Also, according to a questionnaire survey by a Japanese company, about one third business people between 20s to 30s go work without wearing watches.
  • Also, according to a questionnaire survey by a Japanese company, about one third business people in their between 20s and to 30s go work without wearing watches.
    　(in blue)
    People assume surveys are made of questions so you don't need to say "questionnaire."
  • It is thought that the number of young people who don't wear watches has rapidly increased due to the spread of mobile phones.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • In fact, I normally didn't wear a watch very much.
  • In fact, I don't normally didn't wear a watch very much.
    　Or you could say, "In fact, I normally don't wear..."

    By saying that you don't normally wear watches, you are also saying that you don't wear them very much.
  • However, recently somehow I came to have an urge of wearing good watches.
  • However, recently somehow I had came to have an urge to wear of wearing good watches.
  • Someday I would like to buy a more classy watch.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
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